Are they can release their tension too, or they will get the secondhand smoke? Actually, smoking can give lots of negative effects for the smoker and the secondhand smoker. Smoking can harm our bodies in many ways, but it is especially harmful to the lungs of a person with asthmas. Tobacco smoke is a powerful trigger of asthma symptoms. That is why I am extremely agreed that, smoking should be banned in the public places so that the nonsmoker will live in the pink of health. Below are reasons why smoking should be banned in public places.
Usually, smokings are allowed at the sideways, restaurant and also at the community centers. These places have many people including the children. Let says, there is a smoker at those places; automatically the people surroundings will be the secondhand smoker. Usually, people don't smoke because they understand the danger of smoking. But, what we worried about is the secondhand smoker. It is because the secondhand smoke may be the main factor in causing to a number of health problems. Mostly, the secondhand smoke will irritate our lungs and it also can reduce the oxygen in our blood.
Furthermore, the secondhand smoke can harm the cardiovascular system of nonsmokers in many ways. For one thing, it causes coronary heart disease, such as a heart attack. It also can damage blood vessels. The secondhand smokes also will effects for the other people especially the children. The effects are worst during the child's first five years, since the child may spend the size of that time with smoking parents. The secondhand smoke will disturb the child physical and cognitive development.
Then, how to protect the nonsmoker from get the secondhand smoke? Of course the banning smoking in public places is the best ideas, but it is not easy to execute. The government must do lots of things such as to determine what public places will be smoke-free. It is depends on recommendations of the people. However there are several ideas for the nonsmoker to avoid them from the secondhand smoke. Firstly, they must always take the `nonsmoking` option that is available. Today many restaurants have nonsmoking sections and the hotel offer nonsmoking rooms and floors. Furthermore, at the office, you can ask the smokers if they would not smoke around you. You also can use a fan and open the window to keep the air moving. But, the best way is not smoke. If the smoker concern about the other people health, they are not smoking at such places. The government also should make a campaign to avoid people from smoking. It is very important to expose about the danger of smoking for public.
In other hand, the government also must punish the person who cannot obey the rule. The smoker must pay a fine. Other than that, The Ministry of Health also must find the best way to stop this smoking habit. When all sectors get together, they can stop the smoking.
As a conclusion, the government must stop the import of cigarette or increase its price even the country get an income from that to make this country as a clean from smoker. Through this way, we can be an example to other countries.
The Evaluative Commentary
I had made a summary of the arguments about the banning smoking in public places. I had chosen this topic because in order to make the smoker become aware about the effects of smoking and the secondhand smoke. This topic also can make the nonsmoker know about their authority in public places. The nonsmokers must get the good and fresh air in the public places.
In order to consider my audience about the arguments, in the first piece, I have mentioned that about the effects for the smokers and the nonsmokers. In the second piece, I have mentioned about what places are allowed for smoking.
In the summary, I have used the technical vocabulary and long sentences because I think this sound more impressive and effective. In my first draft before, I didn't think that it sounded very persuasive so I had used some different ideas and extended on them. An example of this is the long sentence at the end of the last paragraph, when I explain that the nonsmoker must excellent to take an action in order to avoid them from the secondhand smoke. I think that my piece is very effective and will influence the nonsmoker to be brave to safe their life.
When the smoker read about this summary, they will feel guilty and want to stop from smoking at all. It is because, they will realize the danger of smoking and the effects for the nonsmoker.